谁帮我看看语句通不通顺4My good friendHis name is YangZiQiang,he is 13 years old.He is fat,eyes are small.He likes his bicycle and likes to play ping-pong with me together.格式呢？开头是不是空两格？还有My Chinese name is Liu

谁帮我看看语句通不通顺4My good friendHis name is YangZiQiang,he is 13 years old.He is fat,eyes are small.He likes his bicycle and likes to play ping-pong with me together.格式呢？开头是不是空两格？还有My Chinese name is Liu
谁帮我看看语句通不通顺4
My good friend
His name is YangZiQiang,he is 13 years old.He is fat,eyes are small.He likes his bicycle and likes to play ping-pong with me together.
格式呢？开头是不是空两格？
还有
My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,and I don't have an English name.I am 13(thirteen) years old.There are 4(four) persons in my family,my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.I love my family.I like playing with my lovely younger brother.I like painting.my dream is to become a painter.

谁帮我看看语句通不通顺4My good friendHis name is YangZiQiang,he is 13 years old.He is fat,eyes are small.He likes his bicycle and likes to play ping-pong with me together.格式呢？开头是不是空两格？还有My Chinese name is Liu
My good friend
His name is Yang Zi Qiang.He is 13 years old.He is fat and his eyes are small.He likes his bicycle and likes to play ping-pong with me.
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问题补充：格式呢?开头是不是空两格?
是的,开头要空两格
His name is
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My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,and I don't have an English name.I am 13 years old.There are four members in my family.They are my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.I love my family.I like playing with my lovely younger brother.I like painting.My dream is to become a painter.
数目字若是单位数,即1或4等
一般是用字母串出来,即 one ,four
如果是三位数或以上,即用阿拉伯数目表达,即124...
两位数字即串出来或用阿拉伯数目均可
这里用member(成员)来代替person
原文语法没有问题
但用member意思会好一点

1两句话之间如果没有连词的话，不能用逗号隔开，要么句号，要么加连词
2like doing 表示爱好，所以是like playing....
3with me和together重复了，把together 去掉。
修改如下：
My Good Friend
His name is YangZiQiang.He is 13 years old. He is fat...

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1两句话之间如果没有连词的话，不能用逗号隔开，要么句号，要么加连词
2like doing 表示爱好，所以是like playing....
3with me和together重复了，把together 去掉。
修改如下：
My Good Friend
His name is YangZiQiang.He is 13 years old. He is fat, and his eyes are small. He likes his bicycle and likes playing ping-pong with me.
格式的话，没关系，英语当中，段与段之间要么空行，要么每行开头空四个字符。
下面改第二段
1.人名的写法
2 其他都是些小问题，也没有大错，就改的顺耳一点。
My Chinese name is Liu Yukun,and I don't have an English name. I am 13(thirteen) years old.There are 4(four) people in my family: my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.I love my family.I like playing with my lovely younger brother. I like painting, and my dream is to become a painter.

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His eyes are small